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Writer’s Block!?
I was wondering what I could do to make my story more interesting. Like, the basics that keep a reader intent with the story. I already use plety of details and adj. and try to be clear and percise. Here’s some of how I write just to give an example. This is straight from the story.
She walked down the curvy marble straicase to the Greath Hall, where the dance was being held. Her long floor legnth gown was slowly flowing beneath her red glossy high heeled shoes. She smiled her perfect smile brilliantly at the boy in the black tux, who was there to be her date. He took her hand gracefully, he was asking for a dance. He pulled her to the dance floor and wrapped his arms gently around her waist as she wrapped her arms around his neck, folding one over the other. Not a word was needed to be spoke, for it was all in their eyes. Love and Passion stood in the gaze he had looked deep into her soul.
I’m only 13 so I’m young still. Please help me with this! Thank you in advance! 
:D
The biggest problem i see is that you start every word with “He” and “She” or a Variant. You could also add the persons feelings and slip in reasons for everything. I edited your paragraph and added some stuff, which can show you how dramatic a change that can make. You also need to break it into smaller paragraphs.
Edit 1
Tiffany walked down the curvy marble straicase to the Great Hall, where the dance to commemerate her coming out as a debutante was being held. Her long floor length gown was slowly flowing beneath her red glossy high heeled shoes.
Swallowing her pride, She smiled her perfect smile brilliantly at the boy in the black tux. He was there to be her date.
_who’s this dork_, she thought. She didn’t know him from Adam, he was just some guy her dad invited so her dad would look good.
He took her hand gracefully, he was asking for a dance in his own barbaric way, not bothering to ask but simply taking.
_Way to pick them dad_ she thought.
The dork pulled her to the dance floor and wrapped his arms gently around her waist as she wrapped her arms around his scrawny neck, folding one over the other. Not a word was needed to be spoke, for it was all in their eyes. His eyes spoke of a love so deep it could never be denied. Sadly no one was listening.
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Edit 2:
Belinda walked down the curvy marble straicase to the Great Hall, where the decades old dance was being held. She loved the dance, it gave her one brief moment of respite from her hellish existence.
Her long floor length gown was slowly flowing beneath her red glossy high heeled shoes. They looked every bit as radiant as the night she died, untainted by the decay of the grave.
She smiled her perfect smile brilliantly at the boy in the black tux, who was there to be her date. Like everyone at the dance, he had died in that fire and was condemned to repeat it once a year.
He took her hand gracefully, he was asking for a dance. Belinda took his hand as she did then, and always would. The man pulled her to the dance floor and wrapped his arms gently around her waist as she wrapped her arms around his neck, folding one over the other.
Not a word was needed to be spoke, for it was all in their eyes. His eyes shone with the love of a young man in spring, a love that could now never be fufilled because of the fire that had taken their lives sixty years earlier.
She savored this moment; At midnight, she would once again be locked in the cold embrace of the tomb for another year.
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There we have two vastly different stories that are made different and more interesting by the addition of charecter details and motivation. Why is the dance being held? Who is invited? Why is she there? Does she want to be there? Does she like some other guy more?
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